2018.06.27
英文メールの書き方：プレゼンについてフィードバックをもらう
こんなシチュエーション、お仕事でありませんか？
プレゼンテーションを終えてみて、100%満足する出来ではありませんでした。でも自分では改善の余地がわからない。社内一プレゼンテーションがうまい上司にフィードバックをお願いしたい。
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ヒカさん、
昨日はプレゼンテーションの後に鋭い質問をたくさんありがとうございました。プロジェクトの難しい部分を改めてよく考えてみるきっかけになりました。
熟練プレゼンターの目から見て私のプレゼンテーションの運び方などに関して改善の余地があれば、是非フィードバックをいただきたいです。
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Hi everyone! Welcome to E-mail Picks.
I'm feeling relieved today because I
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just got a big presentation out of the
way, so I don't need to worry about
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persuading people anymore.
All I need to do is work on that project,
0:00:18.270,0:00:23.609
which is great. But here's the thing:
although the presentation went well overall,
0:00:23.609,0:00:29.279
I felt there were some places I lost
people's focus - I wasn't connecting
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with the audience very well. And everyone
says my presentation was good, but I'm
0:00:34.170,0:00:38.820
pretty sure they felt the same way. So I
want to find out why. Luckily my boss,
0:00:38.820,0:00:44.100
Hika, was in the audience and I know he
saw some room for improvement because he
0:00:44.100,0:00:48.930
is an expert in giving presentations.
He actually raised several questions that
0:00:48.930,0:00:53.550
were very helpful for me to make the
project better, but I also want to know
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ways I can make my presentation skills
better. So that's what I'm doing today,
0:00:57.600,0:01:02.219
I'm writing to my boss to ask for some
feedback. Now in this kind of situation,
0:01:02.219,0:01:07.080
it's very important to be clear about
why you are asking this person for
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feedback - is he a communication expert,
is he very experienced in giving
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presentations - so my boss, Hika, again is
a communication expert. He knows what
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makes a good presentation. So in this
e-mail, I'm going to point that out
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because that's the reason I'm asking
Hika for feedback - not anyone else.
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So here goes:
Hika-san, thank you for the many
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insightful questions after the
presentation yesterday. They helped me
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rethink some parts of the project that
needed more fault. As an experienced
0:01:38.070,0:01:41.640
presenter, did you see any areas I could
improve on in terms of delivering the
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presentation? I have exhausted all my
ideas on bettering my skills. It would
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mean the world to me if I could receive
some feedback from you. Kyota. Okay so
0:01:50.820,0:01:55.140
first of all, I started out by thanking
him for his active participation during
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my presentation and then I asked for
feedback by stating that he is an
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experienced presenter and that I didn't
have any ideas myself on how to improve.
0:02:04.610,0:02:09.470
The last phrase: "it would mean the world
to me" is another way to say
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I would appreciate it very, very much.
Of course, I'm exaggerating a little bit, but
0:02:13.700,0:02:18.560
it's true that I really need feedback
from Hika. Alright so there you go,
0:02:18.560,0:02:23.090
An e-mail to get feedback on a presentation
you made. I hope that will help you in
0:02:23.090,0:02:26.930
some way in the near future. So, that's it
for today, thank you for watching.
0:02:26.930,0:02:29.560
I'll see you next week.
Hi everyone! Welcome to E-mail Picks.
I'm feeling relieved today because I
0:00:10.050,0:00:14.040
just got a big presentation out of the
way, so I don't need to worry about
0:00:14.040,0:00:18.270
persuading people anymore.
All I need to do is work on that project,
0:00:18.270,0:00:23.609
which is great. But here's the thing:
although the presentation went well overall,
0:00:23.609,0:00:29.279
I felt there were some places I lost
people's focus - I wasn't connecting
0:00:29.279,0:00:34.170
with the audience very well. And everyone
says my presentation was good, but I'm
0:00:34.170,0:00:38.820
pretty sure they felt the same way. So I
want to find out why. Luckily my boss,
0:00:38.820,0:00:44.100
Hika, was in the audience and I know he
saw some room for improvement because he
0:00:44.100,0:00:48.930
is an expert in giving presentations.
He actually raised several questions that
0:00:48.930,0:00:53.550
were very helpful for me to make the
project better, but I also want to know
0:00:53.550,0:00:57.600
ways I can make my presentation skills
better. So that's what I'm doing today,
0:00:57.600,0:01:02.219
I'm writing to my boss to ask for some
feedback. Now in this kind of situation,
0:01:02.219,0:01:07.080
it's very important to be clear about
why you are asking this person for
0:01:07.080,0:01:11.580
feedback - is he a communication expert,
is he very experienced in giving
0:01:11.580,0:01:17.430
presentations - so my boss, Hika, again is
a communication expert. He knows what
0:01:17.430,0:01:21.750
makes a good presentation. So in this
e-mail, I'm going to point that out
0:01:21.750,0:01:26.970
because that's the reason I'm asking
Hika for feedback - not anyone else.
0:01:26.970,0:01:30.630
So here goes:
Hika-san, thank you for the many
0:01:30.630,0:01:34.170
insightful questions after the
presentation yesterday. They helped me
0:01:34.170,0:01:38.070
rethink some parts of the project that
needed more fault. As an experienced
0:01:38.070,0:01:41.640
presenter, did you see any areas I could
improve on in terms of delivering the
0:01:41.640,0:01:46.140
presentation? I have exhausted all my
ideas on bettering my skills. It would
0:01:46.140,0:01:50.820
mean the world to me if I could receive
some feedback from you. Kyota. Okay so
0:01:50.820,0:01:55.140
first of all, I started out by thanking
him for his active participation during
0:01:55.140,0:01:59.820
my presentation and then I asked for
feedback by stating that he is an
0:01:59.820,0:02:04.610
experienced presenter and that I didn't
have any ideas myself on how to improve.
0:02:04.610,0:02:09.470
The last phrase: "it would mean the world
to me" is another way to say
0:02:09.470,0:02:13.700
I would appreciate it very, very much.
Of course, I'm exaggerating a little bit, but
0:02:13.700,0:02:18.560
it's true that I really need feedback
from Hika. Alright so there you go,
0:02:18.560,0:02:23.090
An e-mail to get feedback on a presentation
you made. I hope that will help you in
0:02:23.090,0:02:26.930
some way in the near future. So, that's it
for today, thank you for watching.
0:02:26.930,0:02:29.560
I'll see you next week.
