2018.08.15
英文メールの書き方：企画の承認を再度検討してもらう
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Hello everyone! Welcome to E-mail Picks.
I've been slightly busy these days
0:00:09.480,0:00:14.759
because I was assigned to a new project,
so I was trying to figure out what the
0:00:14.759,0:00:19.560
goal of that project was and how I was
going to accomplish that goal. But as I
0:00:19.560,0:00:25.920
was working on that project, the goal in
my mind started to change from making
0:00:25.920,0:00:31.859
business impact to making the project
work. There are so many puzzle pieces to
0:00:31.859,0:00:36.660
put together that putting together the
puzzle pieces became the goal -- not a good
0:00:36.660,0:00:42.899
situation. So when I gave my proposal to
my boss, Hika, he realized that I was at a
0:00:42.899,0:00:48.180
loss. So he helped me simplify the
project and therefore I was able to make
0:00:48.180,0:00:53.430
revisions to the project and my proposal.
So today. I'm going to write an e-mail to
0:00:53.430,0:00:58.559
send in my revised work and also, in the
same e-mail, I'm going to set up a meeting
0:00:58.559,0:01:02.789
with Hika so that we can go over the
proposal together. So let's see what that
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e-mail will look like. OK, so here goes:
Hika-san, thank you for reviewing my
0:01:09.060,0:01:13.170
proposal and giving me feedback.
It helped me clarify the goal of the
0:01:13.170,0:01:16.950
initiative once again and I believe I
have now put together a proposal for an
0:01:16.950,0:01:20.970
effective and feasible project. May I
schedule a brief meeting to go over the
0:01:20.970,0:01:24.840
attached to proposal this Thursday? I saw
an opening in your schedule at 4:00 p.m.
0:01:24.840,0:01:28.740
so I went ahead and booked a meeting
room. Please let me know if you have
0:01:28.740,0:01:34.740
other plans then. See you on Thursday.
Kyota. Okay so in the first paragraph,
0:01:34.740,0:01:39.720
I thanked he Hika for helping me brush up
the project. Now, the purpose of the next
0:01:39.720,0:01:45.149
paragraph is to set up a meeting.
My boss is a busy guy, but I know when he
0:01:45.149,0:01:49.380
is available or not because all
employees share their calendars on the
0:01:49.380,0:01:53.970
cloud in my company. So I looked at Hika's schedule and saw that he was
0:01:53.970,0:01:59.190
available on Thursday at 4:00, so I wrote:
"I went ahead and booked
0:01:59.190,0:02:03.030
a meeting room" and just in case he had some
other plan in mind,
0:02:03.030,0:02:07.830
I wrote: "please let me know if you have
other plans then." So there you go
0:02:07.830,0:02:12.270
an e-mail to ask your boss to review a
revised proposal. I'm pretty confident
0:02:12.270,0:02:15.570
that this proposal will be approved, but
wish me luck.
0:02:15.570,0:02:20.480
So that's it for today, thanks for
watching. I'll see you next week.
Hello everyone! Welcome to E-mail Picks.
I've been slightly busy these days
0:00:09.480,0:00:14.759
because I was assigned to a new project,
so I was trying to figure out what the
0:00:14.759,0:00:19.560
goal of that project was and how I was
going to accomplish that goal. But as I
0:00:19.560,0:00:25.920
was working on that project, the goal in
my mind started to change from making
0:00:25.920,0:00:31.859
business impact to making the project
work. There are so many puzzle pieces to
0:00:31.859,0:00:36.660
put together that putting together the
puzzle pieces became the goal -- not a good
0:00:36.660,0:00:42.899
situation. So when I gave my proposal to
my boss, Hika, he realized that I was at a
0:00:42.899,0:00:48.180
loss. So he helped me simplify the
project and therefore I was able to make
0:00:48.180,0:00:53.430
revisions to the project and my proposal.
So today. I'm going to write an e-mail to
0:00:53.430,0:00:58.559
send in my revised work and also, in the
same e-mail, I'm going to set up a meeting
0:00:58.559,0:01:02.789
with Hika so that we can go over the
proposal together. So let's see what that
0:01:02.789,0:01:09.060
e-mail will look like. OK, so here goes:
Hika-san, thank you for reviewing my
0:01:09.060,0:01:13.170
proposal and giving me feedback.
It helped me clarify the goal of the
0:01:13.170,0:01:16.950
initiative once again and I believe I
have now put together a proposal for an
0:01:16.950,0:01:20.970
effective and feasible project. May I
schedule a brief meeting to go over the
0:01:20.970,0:01:24.840
attached to proposal this Thursday? I saw
an opening in your schedule at 4:00 p.m.
0:01:24.840,0:01:28.740
so I went ahead and booked a meeting
room. Please let me know if you have
0:01:28.740,0:01:34.740
other plans then. See you on Thursday.
Kyota. Okay so in the first paragraph,
0:01:34.740,0:01:39.720
I thanked he Hika for helping me brush up
the project. Now, the purpose of the next
0:01:39.720,0:01:45.149
paragraph is to set up a meeting.
My boss is a busy guy, but I know when he
0:01:45.149,0:01:49.380
is available or not because all
employees share their calendars on the
0:01:49.380,0:01:53.970
cloud in my company. So I looked at Hika's schedule and saw that he was
0:01:53.970,0:01:59.190
available on Thursday at 4:00, so I wrote:
"I went ahead and booked
0:01:59.190,0:02:03.030
a meeting room" and just in case he had some
other plan in mind,
0:02:03.030,0:02:07.830
I wrote: "please let me know if you have
other plans then." So there you go
0:02:07.830,0:02:12.270
an e-mail to ask your boss to review a
revised proposal. I'm pretty confident
0:02:12.270,0:02:15.570
that this proposal will be approved, but
wish me luck.
0:02:15.570,0:02:20.480
So that's it for today, thanks for
watching. I'll see you next week.
